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Intro
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Verse 1
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Verse 2
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(I Know it's all just a bad dream now)
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Chorus
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Repeat Verse 2 

I don't know how this next part goes so if you know know e-mail me

Repeat Verse 1
Repeat Intro
Repeat Chorus


| /  slide up
| \  slide down
| h  hammer-on
| p  pull-off
| ~  vibrato